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Script for the Movie

Discussion in 'Offtopic' started by HARPO!, 9 Mar 2018.

  1. HARPO!

    HARPO! Well-Known Member

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    So if I wrote a script for the battle bay movie? Would you guys accept it? @CaffeinatedChris

    Lol.

    I’m a pretty good writer. And I have a good idea for how it should go!

    @The Grim Repair
     
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  2. HARPO!

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    Ok so I started to write th script for the movie. When I am done with it, or at least done with a good portion of it, is there anyone who wants to read it?
     
  3. HAPPY SITHSHA

    HAPPY SITHSHA Well-Known Member

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    Me.I want to read it.I am eagerly waiting Harpo:):):)
     
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  4. HARPO!

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    Well then I’ll get a move on with it. I’ll have to setup a link to it somehow, I’ll figure that out on a later date. But keep in mind, school work may postpone how soon I want do get this done, but don’t worry, I’ll do it!
     
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    ok everyone, here is what i have so far, i hope you read it and like it, make sure to comment on this post, however, some comments i may not reply to because i probably dont want to ruin a surprise.









    BATTLE BAY THE MOVIE

    WRITTEN BY MICHAEL HARP


    AKA “HARPO!”



























    Opening scene


    Camera scans over a very empty bay, vast, and beautiful, and sunny


    Voice Over:


    Harbormaster:

    Your parents probably told you to not go to far into the water, because there might be sharks or you could drown


    Drowning? Really? That’s the best thing that you got? You can’t scare me with anything else? Well let me try...


    (camera shows the bay)


    Welcome to the bay

    The most dreadful place in existence


    (the camera starts to show broken down ships, fires, broken rock pieces, and smoke.)


    (cont’d)

    Two sides at war for hundreds of years

    The Gaians, and Carthaginians.


    And no resolve


    (camera shows a huge graveyard of destroyed ships)


    Until today


    (camera zooms out again and shows the whole bay

    In the distance, a streak of blue light can be spotted zooming over the waters


    The camera zooms in to show us a speeder boat. On the side of the boat, there are words S.S. Hornet)

    (camera shows the inside of the ship, as well as the captain, Swift!)

    Swift:

    Alright seadogs, I'm ready! Where are you grandpas?



    Bhurt:

    Swift! What did I say about falling out of line?


    Swift:

    Do it with style?


    Bhurt:

    Get your butt back here now!


    Swift:

    Alright alright, turning around. Sheesh!


    (we see Swift’s radar pick up a green dot. It’s his guild captain Bhurt. He is the lead shooter of the team and the second in command when it comes to political deals.)


    Bhurt:

    Thank you. Please stay in position. Cause if you get caught out of position-


    Swift:

    I know! I’ll die because aren't fast enough to keep up.


    Bhurt:

    Hey, watch your tone.


    Swift:

    Sorry. Is there ever gonna be a day where I can be my own leader?


    Bhurt:

    Yeah, get your own guild.

    (swift sighs)

    Aww I’m sorry, did Grandpa hurt your feelings?


    Swift:

    Ok! Just start the battle.


    Bhurt:

    Alright


    (Bhurt turns to a stereo like system, and flips a switch. A green light turns on.)

    Brock! Can you hear me? Come in Brock.


    Brock:

    This is defender leader brock, reporting for duty sir. How are we today?


    Bhurt:

    Fantastic. Ready to dominate! This one is for Carthage!


    Brock:

    Agreed. Lets rock!


    (camera zooms out again to show the bay as the three ships and a small armada behind filing in behind them)


    Bhurt:

    Alright broadcasting to fleet

    (Bhurt flips multiple switches on his stereo, and tons of lights turn green.


    Shooters one through four, come in please.


    Shooter 1:

    Here


    Shooter 2:

    present :


    Shooter 3:

    Hello


    Shooter 4:

    Good afternoon captain!


    Bhurt:

    Speeders please come in


    Speeder 1:

    Reporting


    Speeder 2:

    Here sir


    Speeder 3:

    Reporting:


    Sepeeder 4:

    Hello captain


    Bhurt:

    Great! And now defenders, let's hear you!


    Defender 1:

    Present


    Defender 2:

    Present as well


    Defender 3:

    I’m here


    Defender 4:

    Copy that


    Bhurt:

    Perfect! Everyone's here!

    (on Bhurt’s screen more dots have shown up on radar)

    Alright everyone. We are going into the most heavily guarded territory. There are a lot of objects on this map, so be careful, the enemy can be hiding behind anyone of these glaciers. Also, defenders, keep your boats away from the glaciers, they’ll slow you down and make you easy targets. Everyone understand.


    All:

    Yes.


    Bhurt:

    Good. Listen to my commands for the rest of the battle. And lets see how these fight.


    (camera zooms out again and shows the entire Carthaginian fleet moving over the icy waters. Bhurt’s ship is out in front leading the charge, the speeders following closely up behind, and the defenders bringing up the rear. Everyone is in perfect position, almost like a marching band.)


    (camera changes back to the inside of Bhurt’s ship. It shows a red dot appearing on his radar.)


    Bhurt:

    I’m picking something up 50 meters ahead.


    Swift:

    Got it! Speeders lets go!


    Bhurt:

    Swift! Nevermind

    Alright Shooters and defenders, follow up the speeders. Whoever they find, we gotta pick them off.


    (camera zooms out to show the speeders coming up on an enemy ship. The rest of the team comes in from behind)


    Swift:

    Everyone there are three ships here and five of us. I’ll stun the first guy and then we’ll all trade tesla shots. Pick off the guy in the back.


    (the speeders dance around the small force of shooters causing them tons of trouble. Swift hits the first shooter with a blast cannon shot and stuns him immediately. Then Swift and two speeders zoom past the group, to the back, quickly turn their turrets, and fire torpedoes at the back two shooters, they go down immediately. The two remaining speeders in the front, trade blast cannon shots and tesla bolts and kill the last shooter.)


    Swift:

    Yes!


    (a mortar shot from far away hits one of the speeders and damages a rudder. More mortar shots come from out of nowhere and the speeders really start taking damage.)



    Bhurt:

    Speeders move out. Defenders take the front and push back the enemy, give some protection to our speeders. Shooters, let's kill. Mortimer is out there.


    (the battle continues with the defenders making a very deadly push. The shooters on the enemy side are forced back but are doing a good job keeping the Carthaginians back. The shooters are doing a good job dealing damage, however a new line of ships appears)


    Brock:

    Captain, there is a new line of ships about 34 meters out to our northeast. Enforcer line. We gotta take them down.


    Bhurt:

    Swift, you guys need to regroup as best as possible and stop the enforcer line.)


    Swift:

    Yes sir.

    (swift looks at his radar and sees a line of 10 enforcers making their way towards the shooter and defenders)

    Oh god.


    (The damaged speeders make their way towards the line of enforcers)


    Swift:

    Alright everyone, same ordeal, stun, and pick ‘em off.


    (camera switches back to the Carthaginian shooters and defenders. The defenders have succesfully damaged the enemy team and are pushing in to get the final kill. However, the Gaians disappear behind a glacier, and go off of radar.)


    Bhurt:

    No no no, follow them! Don't let them get away.


    (The Carthaginians go behind the the glacier as well only to met by a fully healed up team of Gaians. They have fixers)




    Bhurt:

    Shoot, quick retreat retreat retreat. Fall back.


    (the carthaginians fall back shooting minimal cannon shots back at the enemy and taking a lot of damage)


    (Camera switches back to the speeders. They are approaching the enforcers with full force.)


    Swift:

    Ok, on my mark. NOW!

    (the speeders shoot their tesla bolts directly at the enforcers. However the enforcers block the onslaught of bolts with their shields.)


    Swift:

    What! You gotta be kidding me what the heck was that! Speeders, regroup and fall back, don't rush in!


    (the speeders fall back and regroup behind a glacier)


    Speeder 3:

    Swift how are we gonna do this, they just stopped our bolts completely


    Swift:

    Alright, I got it. Whos got the frost?


    Speeder 1 and 2:

    Frost launcher!/I got a blaster!


    Swift:

    Ok, so here's what we’re gonna do, the frost speeders will come out from behind the glacier on the left side, the rest of us on the right. As soon as we pop out, frosters freeze, and the rest of us fire our cannons. Is that clear?


    All speeders:

    Yes!


    Swift:

    Good, now go go GO!
     
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    :eek:
    I didn’t even read it, but based on the fact the my finger hurts from scrolling, you put a lot of effort into this
     
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    Pretty good.
     
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    thanks so much everyone for the feedback so far, the next section will hopefully drop soon. Now its up to you guys, do want the next section to be a little shorter than the one that i just posted, or do you like reading long posts? shorter is easier for me cause then i can possibly post updates to the script two times in a week.
    @wreck your day @Ultrah @Sewah
     
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    I can't wait for the Enfos and Fixers
     
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    They’re the enemies! :) Felix, Isak, and Mortimer
     
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    Double thumbs up:D.....:(I only got 2
     
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    I know there are some huge grammar mistakes and there are apt of places to add on to and make better, but this is the first draft of the first section of the movie. So give it time!
     
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    How so? Give me your input.
     
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    I'll definitely read it! I love reading
     
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    Dude Good Job Mate Well Done Keep Making More :)
     
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    So in the previous scene u saw tht how Bhurt with Swift and Brock lead the team to defeat their enemy where they defeat some shooters but there Tesla bolt don't work on the enforcer's Tesla shield and swift made up a plan of using frost blaster and launcher.....

    Continued......

    All the speeders do as commanded by Swift....The frost speeders come with left side and the other ones come from right....they surround all the enforcers and freeze them and shoot torps. all enforcer dies without doing any attack

    Swift

    Haha!! They think they can defeat us....Good work guys


    Speeder 4

    Captian!!!


    Swift

    What??


    Speeder 4

    Where is speeder 3??


    Swift

    He was here a minute ago


    Speeder 4

    Ya but now....?


    Speeder 3

    Help! Help!


    Swift

    There he is.....but where is his boat......Let's help him quickly


    Speeder 1

    Captian we can't get there


    Swift

    Why?


    Speeder 1

    That enforcers laid mines by the time we were killing them


    Swift

    WTH...now how will we help him??


    Speeder 2

    Let him die....we can't save him


    Swift

    Are u a fool? He is our team member....we should help him

    (Swift think of something.... suddenly a idea flash through his mind)

    Swift

    (Shouts) Speeder 3....hold on we will save u soon

    Guys let's help Shooters and Defenders so defenders can eat 1-2 mine to make the path


    Speeders

    Ok sir!!


    (All speeders use their overboosts and nitros to reach as quickly as possible where they found dead fixers and shooters)

    Swift

    Bhurt!!


    Bhurt

    Swift.....No time to talk

    (A big mortar falls from the sky)

    Brock

    OMG!!! We can't take hit of tht mortar....all defenders r already injured and it looks deadlier than a mine

    (Suddenly a enforcer come and block that mortar with his Tesla shield)

    Bhurt

    Who r u??


    ?¿?¿?

    No time to talk....let's finish this stupid guys

    (They were just turning there turret and that friendly enforcer vanished.)

    Bhurt

    Where is tht enforcer?


    Defender 2

    There he is.....


    Bhurt

    Unbelievable!! He is faster than our speeders


    ?¿?¿?

    Guys....follow me

    (The team follow him and he blocks away all mortars.....All bcm surprised)

    (All reach inside the boundaries and see moritimer shooting his mortars)

    Swift

    Speeders take the lead....go close to him as he can't to anything if we will be close

    (Speeders go close and stun him and then attack with cannons....suddenly the enforcer shoots a grenade on Mortimer but Mortimer vanishes....All the enemies vanishes and a booking voice say....U can't defeat me...Hahahaha

    Bhurt,Swift,Brock and ?¿?¿

    Who r u??


    Booming voice

    M the demon Lord Dr. Buzzkill


    All

    Come show us who u r.....

    (No reply)

    Bhurt

    Now say who.....


    Swift

    (Cutting his line....We need to save our speeder)

    Brock

    Which defender has the capability to eat 1-2 mine??


    Defender 3,4

    We can do this


    Brock

    Ok than......

    (All of the team went where they found the speeder holding a tree trunk)

    Brock

    At my command.....GooOOoooOoo

    (Brock and 2 defenders eat some mines and save the speeder)

    Bhurt

    Now tell me who u r


    ?¿?¿

    I am.......





    (To be continued)
     
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  18. Cryix

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    I think there will be much grammar mistake in my script and sorry for tht and ya.......... I also know that my script is much worse than of Harpo but wht can u expect with a 13 year child who is bad in English
     
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    You’ll see what happens next, I’m already writing it, but thank so for the suggestions dude!
     
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